Comments on: Mares Eat Oats

By: Daniel

Daniel — Sun, 12 Sep 2010 15:36:49 +0000

This moment is brilliant:

“Since then I’ve been on a new spiritual path.” She fingered her vulva amulet. “Exploring new territory within myself.”
I held up my empty McDonald’s cup. “I have to find a place for this,” I said.

Great story. Thank you.

By: PSO

PSO — Sat, 12 Sep 2009 17:51:48 +0000

Thank you, George. That was beautiful.

By: Dorothyanne Brown

Dorothyanne Brown — Wed, 02 Sep 2009 19:02:42 +0000

Lovely, lovely, lovely. Surprising and involving. Thanks so much for sharing it with us.

By: Susan

Susan — Sat, 22 Aug 2009 14:57:42 +0000

Good, good story. I was so pulled into it (guess shouldn’t read online fiction at work) that when someone asked me a question, for a moment I could not recall where I was.

By: Sharon Bippus

Sharon Bippus — Tue, 21 Jul 2009 22:58:21 +0000

Love the last line of that story! Funny though, only from reading the feedback from Judith Goran did I make the connection with the title. But I don’t think it matters that some readers won’t make that connection either. It was a good sweet, but not overly sentimental story, and really showed how perspective can chamge everything. I’m reminded of Paul Harvey—And now you know the rest of the story…

By: Cyndi

Cyndi — Tue, 21 Jul 2009 17:37:33 +0000

Wonderful, lyrical, heart-touching…your AWW offerings were not one-hit-wonders! Thanks for sharing yourself with us last week.

By: Jack Ridl

Jack Ridl — Thu, 02 Jul 2009 20:06:06 +0000

George,
Finally it’s a hot 50 degree July day, just right for sitting down at last with your story. And I’m sure glad I did. The temperature is now nearing 100 thanks to you. Yep, you did it again, created a world and sent a kind-hearted laugh and a good-hearted sigh through your terrific story. The only thing missing was a toss from you of a hunk of chocolate! Thanks so much!

By: Diane Schenker

Diane Schenker — Tue, 16 Jun 2009 01:34:00 +0000

Hey George–you’ve got the juju magic going, what to leave out, what to drop in, the tone. You’ve got the storyteller juice, kiddo! oxoxds

By: JR

JR — Mon, 15 Jun 2009 12:55:26 +0000

Powerful story George! I’m reminded of Margo Rabb’s “How To Tell A Story” from Zoetrope.

By: DIann Neil Engblade

DIann Neil Engblade — Fri, 12 Jun 2009 17:29:49 +0000

I loved your story, George. I’m so glad that I got a chance to read it.

By: Constance Rossman

Constance Rossman — Fri, 12 Jun 2009 15:59:52 +0000

Thanks for sharing that story, George, I can only guess at the terrible disappointment Ed felt when he was reminded that his mother chose Witski and “her little boy’ casting out her true son–and worse, that she still remembers him now, calling him ‘Poor little Richard.”

We are often not only not-heroes to our parents, but also judged more harshly aginst the lives of other children around us.

If you want to read a worthy one of mine, check out the “Afterburn SF” magazine site in July, and look for a story called “Burning Bright.” No, it it not about William Blake; more about the ‘tyger’ of his poem. It’s theme is loss of one’s ability to lead the life one chooses, and how it affects the central character, whose role defines him.

By: Judith Goren

Judith Goren — Thu, 11 Jun 2009 21:23:47 +0000

I LOVED your story. Good to see who you are after receiving so many invitations to writers events from you. I’m old enough to remember all the words to Mares Eat Oats (Mairzy Doates) and I think your story fulfilled all the intentions of the questions the teacher osed at the end.

Best wishes,
Judith Goren

By: Patrick McFarlane

Patrick McFarlane — Thu, 11 Jun 2009 13:20:47 +0000

George took me there… I can see the relationships and swirling about.
I like it.

Patrick

By: Anne-Marie Oomen

Anne-Marie Oomen — Thu, 11 Jun 2009 13:19:20 +0000

Fabulous story! The ending is just right–restrained and clear. The “little song” comes to hold all the irony one could wish for. I also enjoyed the descriptions of the workshop characters, funny but not mocking. We recognize them all. I can see why the editors selected this story. Thanks for writing this.

By: Marie

Marie — Thu, 11 Jun 2009 09:40:58 +0000

I enjoyed that story, George. Thanks very much for writing it. –Marie